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if i die young,

paint my coffin.
splatter it with colour,
so no one can help but think
it's something
passionate and
beautiful and
strong.

cover me in sheet music.
the notes will close around me,
the words of my favourite songs
pressed
against my coffin.
pressed
to my ears.
pressed
to my body.
while i rest for eternity.

and while you're there,
bury me in poetry.
bury me in words
that brought me to tears.
made me show emotion.
bury me in words
that were mine,
when i put pen to paper,
and bled.

bury me at sunrise,
because this is a beginning
it's just a new day.

dress me in a floral print,
one ring,
one necklace.
the ones i always wore.

and do not bring me roses.
bring me dandilions and daisies and
orchids and
sunflowers.
scatter pine needles on my grave,
(but not the pointy kind)
so it will be soft to walk on.

do not bring me to a graveyard,
because
it is a place of
mourning.
and i am not to be mourned
for.

if i die young,
remember,
to me,
it was long.

it was my whole life.
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personal.

only the good die young.

"how good do you have to be to be considered a good person?"
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Emo-Skittle-Eater Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student General Artist
nothing to say... im amazed at how for some reason this reminded me of myself...
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The-Picturer Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
this is so beautiful!
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
thank you. : )
i'm so glad you think so.

it's probably the most difficult thing i've ever written.
i wrote it after i lost someone who was like an older brother to me.
and ever since then, i couldn't help wondering if he'd have done something differently. i couldn't help remembering that he died young.
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The-Picturer Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
i'm not going to patronise you by pretending i understand, because i have no idea how hard that must have been. i have to say though, you were very brave in writing this, let alone sharing it with us! it's really a stunning piece.

i'm sure he is insanely proud right now.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011
it really helped me through it. writing is a form of therapy so healing that i can't even begin to tell you how much easier it makes things.
not to say that it makes them easy, just easier.

and it's hard to go through things alone. so letting people see what you're going through, although not always easy, is sometimes necessary. terrifying, but needed.
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The-Picturer Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
that's beautiful. don't stop sharing with us! it's really inspiring, and i don't mean that in the generic way. this actually made me stop, think and want to create.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011
i can't tell you how much that means to me. :heart:

thank you so so so much.
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The-Picturer Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011
it's the truth, so you're very welcome! <3
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2011
Wow, this is beautiful. It's obvious that you put your heart into it. It's hard to lose someone, especially when they're young. My next door neighbor's baby died a year and a half ago, but it still hurts sometimes. He was a sweet boy, one and a half years old himself. Died of cancer, but with a smile on his face. He always seemed to be smiling. *sniff*
This was very touching. Thank you.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
my brother's best friend. who i've known since we were kids. he was like another brother to me. his little sister is one of my closest friends.
he was DD for a bunch of people at a party, and another drunk driver hit them, and he died.
it really is hard, and it does still hurt. it hasn't quite been a year. it's 8 months on friday.
so this is an extremely personal piece. probably the hardest thing to write that i've ever written. and because of that, it's my favourite. i'm so glad you like it. :heart:
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
Wow, I'm so sorry. I've never lost someone around my age. I wish people wouldn't drive drunk. When my mum was 17, her boyfriend was killed by a drunk driver.
I don't think that hurt ever quite leaves, though it may lessen. Writing something that comes from such strong emotions definitely is hard, but it's worth it in the end. I have a piece that encompasses the emotions I never let myself feel, the things I've always wanted but know I'll probably never have, and it was so, so hard, but the result was worth all the work.
:tighthug:
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
it was not an easy time.
i hope no one ever has to go through what i did, and yet i know that won't happen.
i just hope everyone who does, is able to make it through.
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DNA-The-Authoress Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
I hope so, too. Thanks for being open enough to post this poem. I'm sure it's helped a lot of people.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
it's helped me a lot, that's for sure.
and anyone else it helps is a bonus. : )
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rhieme Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2011  Student Digital Artist
This is lovely
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
thank you very much. :heart:
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nevermorethansomeday Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Pulled at my heart. A note of hope. Absolutely wonderful.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
i'm so glad you liked it. : )
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nevermorethansomeday Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's beautiful. I love your writing. : )
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
aww, thanks! haha
you're sweet. : )
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nevermorethansomeday Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime! All of it is wonderful. Don't ever stop! (:
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011
grikns
you're so wonderful.
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nevermorethansomeday Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Dawh.
I do try. I'm so glad.
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FallinFeathers Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Amazing. Took my breath away.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011
wow. thank you. <3
so so much.
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FallinFeathers Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
You're so very welcome :)
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ijabberjay Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011
this is heartbreakingly lovely.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
thank you so much, lovey. :heart:
i'm so flattered so many people like it.
i never expected it to get this much love.
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DarkMistress48 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
Exactly. I know it won't be happy because all my loved ones will know we will never talk or touch each other ever again, but I still hope they can see it also as a time of love/remembrance and not just grievance/mourning.

:blackrose:
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MadamWonderland Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No you guys will meet again in heaven
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DarkMistress48 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011
True.

:blackrose:
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MadamWonderland Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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DarkMistress48 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
This is a very beautiful poem. You know, when my time comes I don't want everybody to be dressed all in black and mourning my lost either, but instead I want them to be happy and use the time to celebrate what was my life and love for them...not to mention remind them I will be watching over them while they live the rest of their lives. :heart:

:blackrose:
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
i'm so glad you liked it.

yes. that's exactly how i feel. i want it to be a remembrance of me. and it won't be happy, because the people there will miss me. and they'll know i'll never say something to them ever again. they'll know that last time they saw me was just that, the last time. but i always hoped that it could maybe be not sad. not happy, but not sad. bittersweet.
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DarkMistress48 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
Exactly. I know it won't be happy because all my loved ones will know we will never talk or touch each other ever again, but I still hope they can see it also as a time of love/remembrance and not just grievance/mourning.

:blackrose:
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
exactly. :heart:
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radiant-lights Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this is fantastic!

i decided a while ago that at my funeral no one will be obligated to wear black. instead, everyone will be asked to wear their favorite outfit no matter how outrageous it is.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011
yes, i've always wanted that.
i don't want it to be a place of mourning for something lost, but celebration to have had. i want it to be a reminder that they're all still alive, and they're there because they loved me, and chances are i loved them. i want them to know, i don't want them to be sad.
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radiant-lights Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i agree completely. sadly- there is not much we can change or influence after we have passed.
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011
yes. very true.
thank you so very much for the favourite, by the way. :heart:
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radiant-lights Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome (:
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011   Writer
oh my god, i've been thinking about this lately... how i want my coffin to be painted bright

this is so unbelievably gorgeous. you're wonderful in every way ♥
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011
i don't want that traditional measured out perfect wood. i want imperfection. i like to think lived creatively, and i want to die creatively too.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011   Writer
fantastic ♥ what would you paint (or have painted) on your coffin? or what would it look like?
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011
i think it would just be a lot of really bright colours. just paint splattered all around.
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breathingglassstars Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011   Writer
sounds perfect.
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little-supernova Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, but this is beautiful. I can attest; I struggle with the phrase "good person" myself. :heart:
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breathinginthestars Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011
it's a very confusing phrase.
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haileyiswin Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011
Amazing.
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